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Hi Natalia! I am truly enraptured by your description of this dance and love how you connect the emotion of the piece to the perspective of the watcher. I love not only your descriptions of the "earthy" movements used in this piece, but also the omission of "stage" language to favor this reflection of the earth (ex: they look at the "sky" and not the ceiling, the "ground" and not the floor). I also enjoy how you write the transitions between juxtaposing movements. I think it might be made even more powerful and bring out the beauty of your words and the emphasis of the scene if you use some of the scene analysis skills you show at the end during these moments of juxtaposition (i.e.: why do their movements shift from slow to frantic from a story perspective?). Great work and I look forward to seeing more!